Ghostsoul
"You can order me around and I'll disappoint you!"
- Joined
- May 25, 2015
- Messages
- 480
- Reaction score
- 188
Special:
Not much to say about this one, I think it could have just been a short chapter 3, I'm not too sure why it's considered a 'special'. It feels mostly like more scene and plot setting, which is fine. There is some characterization sprinkled here and there through the chapter, I think what's most strange is the juxtaposition between the two 'plots'. One with the Raltz and Mewtwo and the other being a character driven, rather sexual one, not to say it's bad, but odd seeing those two plots so close together.
This is some detailed description, it's good, but perhaps a little excessive.He was not surprised to see a green metal incense holder on the table, green-painted metal in the shape of a bowl with a lily in the middle that had the stick of incense rising above it. A soft, almost invisible line of smoke rose from it as the scented stick slowly burned.
I think this provided some good world-building/foreshadowing but then again, I'm not sure it fits the overall tone of the scene.“Officials in Hanada are unveiling the Mewtwo Memorial, dedicated to listing the various trainers who have died fighting the Pokemon. The statue is to be unveiled on December 17th, the 16th anniversary of the deaths of Hibiki and Kotone Murai. Satoshi Takeuchi, more commonly known by his trainer codename of Red, has declined to attend, citing memories of Green’s demise.
Again, the 'Let's discuss possibly serious plot matters' along side 'flirtatious and kinky discussion'. Not a 'bad' thing, but something which needs talent to pull of well, and make it work.“She could be a research specimen that escaped,” Kotone suggested, even as her fingers switched from tickling to rubbing-
Not much to say about this one, I think it could have just been a short chapter 3, I'm not too sure why it's considered a 'special'. It feels mostly like more scene and plot setting, which is fine. There is some characterization sprinkled here and there through the chapter, I think what's most strange is the juxtaposition between the two 'plots'. One with the Raltz and Mewtwo and the other being a character driven, rather sexual one, not to say it's bad, but odd seeing those two plots so close together.