SuperTrainStationH
East Unova Resident
- Joined
- Feb 13, 2011
- Messages
- 371
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- 74
Re: A Da Vinci Smile (III)
Well, this has been open in my browser in a tab waiting for me to read it, having never even taken a glance at this user's writing before, and I have to say it was quite a treat. The opening with the description of the community center was entertaining, vivid, and added a lot of authenticity. I felt not only as though the narrator had been to that particular building, but I had as well. There's a vibe a lot of public buildings have and this really captured it. The rest of that first chapter kept me engaged too, and I liked the exchanges between Adèle, Josh, and Graham, as others have said, it was very believable.
I left the first chapter wondering how the coffee meeting (whether or not it ends up being a "date") between Adéle and Josh is going to go.
Well, this has been open in my browser in a tab waiting for me to read it, having never even taken a glance at this user's writing before, and I have to say it was quite a treat. The opening with the description of the community center was entertaining, vivid, and added a lot of authenticity. I felt not only as though the narrator had been to that particular building, but I had as well. There's a vibe a lot of public buildings have and this really captured it. The rest of that first chapter kept me engaged too, and I liked the exchanges between Adèle, Josh, and Graham, as others have said, it was very believable.
I left the first chapter wondering how the coffee meeting (whether or not it ends up being a "date") between Adéle and Josh is going to go.