Sort through chapters easier maybe
I noticed that there aren't paragraph spaces in between dialogue. I don't know if it was intentional or not, but it feels a bit... odd?“Uh, h-hey Mom.”
Her voice sounded fiery. “Don’t ‘hey Mom’ me, young man. Do you realize how much it cost your father and me to send you to boarding school? And when are you gonna settle on a major?”
“I know, I know, I keep changing my major, I’m sorry.”
“We are not gonna let you bleed us dry by doing poorly in college. We paid good money for this schooling, and you need to get your act together. This isn’t high school anymore, T.D. We need to see some real improvement after Spring Break or we’re pulling your funding. Do you understand me?”
Same thing here; Spring Break is capitalized, but winter break isn't.when he was back home for winter break
Oh no Truman lolMaybeeee meet some girls. Eh?
Tense change here.And in a way, maybe that’s what’s been messing him up so much.