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Re: Crossover Battles
Technical Accuracy/Style
Not up to your usual standards I'm afraid. I noticed a fair few errors - spelling errors, one cloned paragraph, one misnamed character. The kind of thing a thorough proof reading is needed to excise
Aptness
As far as the match-up itself is concerned it works fine. I have to disagree, not so much with the winner, but the way it played out. Gela spends most of her time programming, not battling, while Zephyr is a top trainer from an elite school. Its established fairly early on that Gela hadn't even heard of most of Zephyr's pokémon. Ok, she could have done some research, but there's only so much research you can do in one night. It doesn't make sense that Zephyr should walk so easily into so many traps, and have so few ways to get out of sticky spots.
I get the feeling that you knew this, because Gela monologues an attempt at explaining it away. You can guess then that I don't really buy it. Sure, the students at Elemental Academy are just that ... but still there's multi-region teams being common, and expert instruction to consider, in a school that's highly competitive
Story/Characters
Aside from the battle being a bit one-sided, there was plenty to like in the ways attacks interacted. The battle would have been improved by more sneaky ghosty tactics from Zephyr's team, I think. I'd forgotten quite how annoying Gela was as a character, but I think I said all I ever needed to about that in my previous reviews.
Technical Accuracy/Style
Not up to your usual standards I'm afraid. I noticed a fair few errors - spelling errors, one cloned paragraph, one misnamed character. The kind of thing a thorough proof reading is needed to excise
Aptness
As far as the match-up itself is concerned it works fine. I have to disagree, not so much with the winner, but the way it played out. Gela spends most of her time programming, not battling, while Zephyr is a top trainer from an elite school. Its established fairly early on that Gela hadn't even heard of most of Zephyr's pokémon. Ok, she could have done some research, but there's only so much research you can do in one night. It doesn't make sense that Zephyr should walk so easily into so many traps, and have so few ways to get out of sticky spots.
I get the feeling that you knew this, because Gela monologues an attempt at explaining it away. You can guess then that I don't really buy it. Sure, the students at Elemental Academy are just that ... but still there's multi-region teams being common, and expert instruction to consider, in a school that's highly competitive
Story/Characters
Aside from the battle being a bit one-sided, there was plenty to like in the ways attacks interacted. The battle would have been improved by more sneaky ghosty tactics from Zephyr's team, I think. I'd forgotten quite how annoying Gela was as a character, but I think I said all I ever needed to about that in my previous reviews.