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Shouldn't it be "If I relate to his negative feelings"?
Yep, thanks!
It certainly seems like Markus is opening a lot more to Hailey now, in fact he seems kind of desperate in this latest letter. It makes sense though, he finally feels like he can open up to her and that he has someone that values him and worries about him. But it does worry me that Markus could end up becoming too dependant on Hailey and that could lead to her being put off.
It's certainly possible with her personality and situation!
The focus on this chapter, and the part that I found most interesting was on explaining the lore behind fairy types. It's kind of strange to see you writing chapters that essentially focus solely on giving out lore, but the format for your story fits pretty well with it. It also highlights who you've put more focus on your worldbuilding for this story, particularly small comments about how Gligar deposited their poison in rivers and how that caused people to develop sickness or how that wild herd of Trevenant ended up causing landslide sin Geosenge. Their aside comments but they help add extra depth to your world. Particularly the fact that you go out of your way to include Pokemon as a part of it.
And it's interesting on my end to write lore, lol, but also fun! Based off of past feedback, I tried to connect the ideas to Markus's situation better.
That doesn't compare to how you explained fairy types here. I really liked your interpretation on why they weren't considered a separate Pokemon group and the fact that people from Kalos were the ones that pushed this change is also a neat nod to the games. Amusingly though, it seems like some interpretations of fairy types compare them to angels or demons, based on how some people see them as agents of the legendaries both good and bad. Granted, you still tie them back to their Welsh and Celtic roots by adding in the different superstitions and how fickle they can be if they aren't appeased.
Yeah, I tried to incorporate various fairy lore backgrounds from real life.
Of course, it wouldn't be a Markus letter if you didn't try to shatter another concept about the league, particularly in how hypocritical they, and gym leaders, can be in their actions. Whether it'd be giving aggressive sounding names to moves that are supposed to be part of a clean sport or giving out Pokemon to prisoners who are meant to be rehabilitated while still treating them as if they're a danger to the Pokemon that are supposed to help them. The latter one specifically fits great with Valerie who's always come off as an unsettling character to meet.
And well, now I'm just waiting to see what Hailey has to say to Markus' requests.
Glad to hear Valerie's portrayal is working out! It's always iffy, inserting a canon character into my fics. There's so many interpretations of them, it seems. As for Haley's response, I'll be posted that in a few minutes here~