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TEEN: Oblivion (Ch 2 up)

Master Yiseeks

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He was born in the Land of Fire.

Or at least, that was what he had been told. He could not remember the early years of his life, and he had no parents to tell him otherwise. All he had was the Yondaime, with pale skin and long black hair, and eyes like a snake. Orochimaru took care of him, teaching him of the world, and sometimes the Sandaime Hokage would come over and teach him wind jutsu. The Sandaime looked threatening with the bandages covering most of his body, but Orochimaru told him that Danzo was a good man.

He would sometimes wander around the village, Konoha. The people would glare at him, whisper, and he hated it, and hated them for it. When he would tell Orochimaru, the Yondaime would just smile and tell him to prove them wrong.

As he grew, he began making friends with the other children. It would never last, whether it was with the shy girl Sakura, or the kind boy Haku. Their parents would pull them away, and so he stayed alone, just watching.

Until one day, a teenage boy named Shisui befriended him. Shisui trained him too, and taught him the Shunshin, enabling him to reach high speeds of movement. Their friendship ended when Shisui was murdered, by who, he didn't know. The Uchiha Clan launched a massive coup d'état against Konoha. Hundreds were killed, until Danzo and Orochimaru killed Fugaku and several of the other leaders.

One of the main instigators, and a suspect in Shisui's murder, Itachi Uchiha, fled the village soon after. A boy named Sasuke was spared, and would often disappear for days. He didn't know what was happening, but the rumors were that Sasuke was Orochimaru's personal apprentice.

He had entered his house one day, to the sight of a small jar in his bed. Inside was Shisui's Mangekyo Sharingan, which he proceeded to implant in his left eye, blocking it with seals to keep it hidden.

The years passed quickly.

He was placed on a team with Sasuke and Hinata Hyuuga. He hated the Hyuuga, with her claims of Hyuuga supremacy. She would always be seen nearly killing the Branch Family members of the Hyuuga, other than her cousin Neji, who was always subdued and her personal servant. Their sensei was Rin Nohara, who was kind and taught them medical jutsu. If he had to, he would admit he had a crush on her.

The team went on several missions, bonding with one another. It was like he had friends.

He...he liked it.

Whether it was saving Kusagakure from Sunagakure ninja, or attacking Takigakure, they would always protect one another. And he would never change anything about it.

But despite his wishes, it did.

During the Chunin Exam, Kumogakure attacked, with the Two Legendary Sannin on their side. Tsunade and Jiraiya killed Orochimaru, despite SOUND, Orochimaru and Danzo's secret guards, interference. Sasuke was killed in the Forest of Death by his brother, who had returned for unknown reasons. Despite unleashing Shisui's Mangekyo Sharingan, he could only stand by and watch as Sasuke was killed by his own brother, and Hinata was captured by Kumo ninja.

He became an emotional wreck, staying in his apartment constantly. Danzo tried to help, but having become Hokage, his time was short.

He would eventually leave the village, to find his own destiny. His search would lead him to the Akatsuki. They wanted Shisui's eye but he would not allow them. He unleashed the full power of Shisui's Mangekyo, placing Kotoamatsukami on Pein, the Leader, and the only one who knew his status as the carrier of Shisui's legacy.

A man claiming to be Madara attacked him next, but by that point he had regained use of Kotoamatsukami, and placed the man under his Genjutsu.

Madara's right eye would prove useful.

And so he trained, and slowly enacted the others in Akatsuki under his control. Kisame. Hidan. Kakuzu. Sasori. Deidara. Zetsu. Konan. Kushimaru. Kabuto. He stayed hidden in the shadows, continuing to allow Pein to be leader, while the Akatsuki hunted for the Biju.

With his leadership, the Akatsuki would kill everyone in their way, taking over Kiri and Iwa, along with several of the minor villages. He had made sure to personally kill the Two Legendary Sannin, gaining revenge for Orochimaru.

Itachi soon came after him, spouting lies of his father, a man named Minato, who was apparently a rogue ninja who attacked the Leaf. He silenced Itachi, using the rogue Uchiha's Mangekyo to power his own.

The Akatsuki fought the remaining villages in a Fourth Great War. He was on the front lines now, laughing at the shock on his former comrades faces. He supposed, that at some point, he just failed to care anymore. He fought his former sensei, but he couldn't bring himself to kill her, and was stabbed in the heart.

She looked at him, crying, and he was in tears too, and she spoke only five words, words that crushed his heart.

"I'm disappointed in you...Menma."

That was the last thing he heard before he died.
 
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Re: Oblivion

Is this a crossover fic? When I read Menma I thought of AnoHana instantly ^^;
Any way, your writing is good but I think the fic would benefit from less jumping around and more explaining. I think you moved too quickly in the story without allowing us to understand the individual characters and events that came and went.
 
Re: Oblivion

Menma is just an alternate Naruto. And as for the jumping around, it's supposed to be like that. There are more chapters in this story...
 
"I'm disappointed in you...Menma."

Menma shot out of bed, sweat dripping down his face. His vision eventually cleared, and he looked around confusedly in a house that certainly wasn't his. Struggling out of bed, his muscles screaming in protest, he managed to struggle to the closet, full of orange tracksuits and orange pants, and a forehead protector. He got dressed, and began walking throughout the house, his senses searching for anything out of the ordinary.

His head was pulsing with a dull pain, and Menma clasped his head with his hand. He walked past a mirror, but stopped, and looked at himself. He was far shorter than he should've been, and his once pale skin was now tan. The strangest addition, however, were the whisker marks on his cheeks. He gently touched them, and stumbled back into the wall.

'Where...What the hell happened?!' He thought in his mind, before forcibly calming himself down.

'Okay...okay, Menma, look at this logically. You died, and now you're in a body that's yours...but...not...yours? Gah!' Menma forced himself off the ground, looking into the mirror once more. Channeling his chakra to his eyes, he felt a small 'block' stop his chakra before he broke through it. His blue eyes transformed into his Eternal Mangekyo Sharingan, and Menma sighed in relief. "Thank Kami..." At least he wasn't completely weakened.

He briefly tapped into his chakra, and recoiled in shock at the sheer amount he had. He had always had higher than average reserves, but his current reserves were incredible...even higher than the Kyuubi Jinchuuriki, Rock Lee. His eyes widening as the implications hit him, he slowly pulled his shirt up, channeling chakra as a black seal appeared on his chest. He slumped back against the wall.

What to do? He honestly had no idea what to do, not in a world where he held the Kyuubi. He struggled back up, walking out of his apparent apartment. He walked down the street, looking at the citizens glaring at him. Mutters of 'Freak' and 'Demon' followed him wherever he went. He ignored them, used to the treatment in his original world. He sighed as he looked at the Hokage Monument, looking at the faces of Hashirama, Tobirama, Danzo...

Wait. That wasn't Danzo.

Menma looked at the Yondaime statue, expecting to see the familiar sight of Orochimaru...only to see a head depicting someone he hadn't seen before. He rubbed his head silently, musing on the latest development. The Sandaime was now Hiruzen Sarutobi, Danzo's old teammate. The Yondaime was someone foreign to him, although he did look somewhat familiar. He was about to continue his observations when a hand landed on his shoulder. Menma looked up at whoever had grabbed him, only to see a man with a black mask covering half of his face and gravity-defying spiky hair.

"Maa, Naruto. You're kinda late for your exam. You haven't forgotten where Training Ground 3 is, have you?" The man said, before pulling Menma along with him. Menma briefly struggled slightly, before resigning himself to his fate.
 
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