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Hello everyone, I have decided to go back into writing fanfics, this one is basically a Trainer Fic.
It was a warm sunny day in Pallet Town, the sun’s heat was gentle, and everyone was waking up and going about their day.
Parents everywhere were opening their mailboxes, checking to see if their child’s Pokémon has been sent in by Prof. Oak. A mother grabbed her bundle of mail, which included a huge package, and rushed into her home, and into her daughter’s room.
“Your Pokémon is here!” She shouted at the top as she was running up the stairs, she heard a loud door bang, which indicated that her daughter had exited her room, the pair met halfway in the corridor.
The daughter, Bell, had long black hair tied up in a ponytail, her eyes were wide and bright green, she looked at the package in her mom’s hand with excitement, and then produced a key, which has been to given to her by Oak earlier that week, from her pocket.
“Do you think I got the one I wanted?” Bell said excited, with a hint of nervousness in her voice.
“I’m sure you did, honey.” Her mom attempted to comfort her as she handed her the parcel, the pair then went into Bell’s room and proceeded to open the packaged.
They removed all the wrapping, and produced a wooden box, inside it were five empty Pokéballs, a guide, some items, and one Pokéball that was wrapped with a metal lock. Bell inserted the key into the lock and twisted, which made a tiny sound that slipped the ears of Bell and her mother. The metal lock fell from the Pokéball.
Bell picked up the Pokéball and closed her eyes and wished for it to be the Pokémon she had wanted, she then slowly opened the Pokéball, which produced a white beam into her lap, and slowly a Pokémon began to form, it was a Bulbasaur.
“It’s what you wanted!” The mother exclaimed in happiness.
Bell was overwhelmed with joy and hugged the Pokémon that had been looking up to her, the Bulbasaur was small in size, indicating that it is a baby.
A few hours passed, in that time Bell was busy reading the guide that was in the box, which included everything she needed to know about raising Pokémon. Bulbasaur was with her mom, who cleaned him and fed him.
Bell packed her stuff in one backpack and opened the door of her room, she went through the corridor, down the stairs, and to the front door, and she opened it to see her mom playing with Bulbasaur outside. As soon as Bulbasaur noticed her, her ran towards her and stood on two legs, leaning his other two on her leg, he smiled up to her and appeared to hug her leg. Bell sat on the ground as she fed Bulbasaur some snacks.
“Alright, I’ll be inside the house if you need me.”
Her mom then got up and went into the house, gently closing the front door behind her.
A young boy approached Bell, he had a Charmander following him.
“Hey Bell!”
“Hi Chris!” Bell was happy to see that her friend had received the Pokémon he had wanted as well.
“I was going to Route 1 to catch a Pokémon,” Chris said. “Wanna come with?”
“On our own?”
“No… Jane is coming with us.”
The group arrived at Route 1 after informing their parents of where they will be. It was an area filled with trees, long grass, and other Trainers. Many Trainers were battling each other. The air was warm, though the sun wasn’t as hot as it was earlier in the day.
Chris was about Bell’s height, he had blonde hair and blue eyes, his features weren’t very distinguished, on the other hand, Jane, was a little taller that the other two, she had short blonde hair, and green eyes, and her features were very detailed.
“I’ll go catch a Pokémon!” Jane seemed more excited than Bell and Chris. She was soon running away from the pair, searching for Pokémon.
“We should search for Pokémon as well.” Chris said.
“Alright,” Bell followed him. “What do you plan on doing after you catch a Pokémon?”
“Probably challenge the Gym in Viridian City.”
“I want to challenge Gyms as well,” Bell said. “But not yet, I’ll catch and train some Pokémon first.”
“I’m going straight after I catch a Pokémon.”
“Are you sure that’s wise?”
“Yeah, why wouldn’t it be?”
Before the pair could finish their conversation, they spotted a couple of Pidgey playing with each other.
“Are you ready” Chris asked as he grabbed his Pokéball.
“Yeah,” Bell produced her Pokéball. “Go Bulbasaur!”
“Go, Charmander!” Chris threw his Pokéball, sending out his Charmander.
“Attack with Tackle!” Bell commanded.
“Use Scratch!” Chris order Charmander.
The pain attacked the Pidgey and managed to surprise them, the attacks landed and threw the Pidgey back a few paces.
“Attack again!” Chris shouted to Charmander, who obeyed and scratched the same Pidgey it did before, while the other Pidgey tackled Bulbasaur back.
“Bulbasaur tackle it again!” Bell said after Bulbasaur was hit by Pidgey. The Bulbasaur threw its body at the Pidgey again, harming it and making it weak enough for capture.
“Alright,” Bell produced an empty Pokéball. “Go!” She shouted as she threw the Pokéball at the Pidgey, Chris did the same thing, but a few seconds earlier than her.
The two Pokéballs settled down, indicating that the Pokémon were successfully caught.
“I did it!” Bell shouted at the top of her lungs, her excitement was much more than Chris’.
“No need to get that excited,” Chris said as he picked up his Pokéball. “I’ll be on my way now, hopefully I’ll meet you somewhere along the road.”
“You’re going now?”
“Yeah, I need to get started, or else I won’t be able to become Champion in time.”
“Well, good luck.”
“Thanks.” He said as he walked off into the distance. Bell then returned to Pallet Town, but was met halfway by Jane.
“Did you catch a Pokémon?” Bell asked Jane, who seemed to be glowing with happiness.
“Yeah,” Jane smiled as she started talking. “I caught a Rattata and I tried to catch a Pidgey, but I couldn’t.”
The pair kept talking about their newly caught Pokémon, until they reached Pallet Town, and each headed in their own direction. The sun was setting, and as Bell approached her house, she managed to spot her mom saying goodbye to Prof. Oak
“Prof. Oak,” Bell grabbed the pair’s attention. “What brings you here?”
“Oh, Bell,” Prof. Oak didn’t seem very surprised to see her; after all, she lived here. “I was just having a talk with your mother about you.”
“Honey,” Bell’s mom entered the conversation. “Prof. Oak and I were just discussing the fact that you want to go and battle Gyms.”
“I think that would be a great thing to do,” Prof. Oak continued. “Your father would be so proud of you.” Bell smiled at the mention of her father. “However, you will need to carry your Pokédex with you, everywhere you go, and record data of the Pokémon you catch.”
“Oh wow,” Bell seemed genuinely surprised, she didn’t expect her wishes to be answered so easily. “So… I can travel on my own now?”
“Yes honey,” Her mom said. “But not right now, you can start as soon as tomorrow morning.”
What do you guys think? Too long? Too short? Not much detail? Grammar mistakes? Spelling? Please tell me so I can improve. This is not my first fanfic, I've written a couple before, but I'm a little rusty, so give me all you got.
A side note: English is my second language.
Chapter 1
The Start
The Start
It was a warm sunny day in Pallet Town, the sun’s heat was gentle, and everyone was waking up and going about their day.
Parents everywhere were opening their mailboxes, checking to see if their child’s Pokémon has been sent in by Prof. Oak. A mother grabbed her bundle of mail, which included a huge package, and rushed into her home, and into her daughter’s room.
“Your Pokémon is here!” She shouted at the top as she was running up the stairs, she heard a loud door bang, which indicated that her daughter had exited her room, the pair met halfway in the corridor.
The daughter, Bell, had long black hair tied up in a ponytail, her eyes were wide and bright green, she looked at the package in her mom’s hand with excitement, and then produced a key, which has been to given to her by Oak earlier that week, from her pocket.
“Do you think I got the one I wanted?” Bell said excited, with a hint of nervousness in her voice.
“I’m sure you did, honey.” Her mom attempted to comfort her as she handed her the parcel, the pair then went into Bell’s room and proceeded to open the packaged.
They removed all the wrapping, and produced a wooden box, inside it were five empty Pokéballs, a guide, some items, and one Pokéball that was wrapped with a metal lock. Bell inserted the key into the lock and twisted, which made a tiny sound that slipped the ears of Bell and her mother. The metal lock fell from the Pokéball.
Bell picked up the Pokéball and closed her eyes and wished for it to be the Pokémon she had wanted, she then slowly opened the Pokéball, which produced a white beam into her lap, and slowly a Pokémon began to form, it was a Bulbasaur.
“It’s what you wanted!” The mother exclaimed in happiness.
Bell was overwhelmed with joy and hugged the Pokémon that had been looking up to her, the Bulbasaur was small in size, indicating that it is a baby.
***
A few hours passed, in that time Bell was busy reading the guide that was in the box, which included everything she needed to know about raising Pokémon. Bulbasaur was with her mom, who cleaned him and fed him.
Bell packed her stuff in one backpack and opened the door of her room, she went through the corridor, down the stairs, and to the front door, and she opened it to see her mom playing with Bulbasaur outside. As soon as Bulbasaur noticed her, her ran towards her and stood on two legs, leaning his other two on her leg, he smiled up to her and appeared to hug her leg. Bell sat on the ground as she fed Bulbasaur some snacks.
“Alright, I’ll be inside the house if you need me.”
Her mom then got up and went into the house, gently closing the front door behind her.
A young boy approached Bell, he had a Charmander following him.
“Hey Bell!”
“Hi Chris!” Bell was happy to see that her friend had received the Pokémon he had wanted as well.
“I was going to Route 1 to catch a Pokémon,” Chris said. “Wanna come with?”
“On our own?”
“No… Jane is coming with us.”
***
The group arrived at Route 1 after informing their parents of where they will be. It was an area filled with trees, long grass, and other Trainers. Many Trainers were battling each other. The air was warm, though the sun wasn’t as hot as it was earlier in the day.
Chris was about Bell’s height, he had blonde hair and blue eyes, his features weren’t very distinguished, on the other hand, Jane, was a little taller that the other two, she had short blonde hair, and green eyes, and her features were very detailed.
“I’ll go catch a Pokémon!” Jane seemed more excited than Bell and Chris. She was soon running away from the pair, searching for Pokémon.
“We should search for Pokémon as well.” Chris said.
“Alright,” Bell followed him. “What do you plan on doing after you catch a Pokémon?”
“Probably challenge the Gym in Viridian City.”
“I want to challenge Gyms as well,” Bell said. “But not yet, I’ll catch and train some Pokémon first.”
“I’m going straight after I catch a Pokémon.”
“Are you sure that’s wise?”
“Yeah, why wouldn’t it be?”
Before the pair could finish their conversation, they spotted a couple of Pidgey playing with each other.
“Are you ready” Chris asked as he grabbed his Pokéball.
“Yeah,” Bell produced her Pokéball. “Go Bulbasaur!”
“Go, Charmander!” Chris threw his Pokéball, sending out his Charmander.
“Attack with Tackle!” Bell commanded.
“Use Scratch!” Chris order Charmander.
The pain attacked the Pidgey and managed to surprise them, the attacks landed and threw the Pidgey back a few paces.
“Attack again!” Chris shouted to Charmander, who obeyed and scratched the same Pidgey it did before, while the other Pidgey tackled Bulbasaur back.
“Bulbasaur tackle it again!” Bell said after Bulbasaur was hit by Pidgey. The Bulbasaur threw its body at the Pidgey again, harming it and making it weak enough for capture.
“Alright,” Bell produced an empty Pokéball. “Go!” She shouted as she threw the Pokéball at the Pidgey, Chris did the same thing, but a few seconds earlier than her.
The two Pokéballs settled down, indicating that the Pokémon were successfully caught.
“I did it!” Bell shouted at the top of her lungs, her excitement was much more than Chris’.
“No need to get that excited,” Chris said as he picked up his Pokéball. “I’ll be on my way now, hopefully I’ll meet you somewhere along the road.”
“You’re going now?”
“Yeah, I need to get started, or else I won’t be able to become Champion in time.”
“Well, good luck.”
“Thanks.” He said as he walked off into the distance. Bell then returned to Pallet Town, but was met halfway by Jane.
“Did you catch a Pokémon?” Bell asked Jane, who seemed to be glowing with happiness.
“Yeah,” Jane smiled as she started talking. “I caught a Rattata and I tried to catch a Pidgey, but I couldn’t.”
***
The pair kept talking about their newly caught Pokémon, until they reached Pallet Town, and each headed in their own direction. The sun was setting, and as Bell approached her house, she managed to spot her mom saying goodbye to Prof. Oak
“Prof. Oak,” Bell grabbed the pair’s attention. “What brings you here?”
“Oh, Bell,” Prof. Oak didn’t seem very surprised to see her; after all, she lived here. “I was just having a talk with your mother about you.”
“Honey,” Bell’s mom entered the conversation. “Prof. Oak and I were just discussing the fact that you want to go and battle Gyms.”
“I think that would be a great thing to do,” Prof. Oak continued. “Your father would be so proud of you.” Bell smiled at the mention of her father. “However, you will need to carry your Pokédex with you, everywhere you go, and record data of the Pokémon you catch.”
“Oh wow,” Bell seemed genuinely surprised, she didn’t expect her wishes to be answered so easily. “So… I can travel on my own now?”
“Yes honey,” Her mom said. “But not right now, you can start as soon as tomorrow morning.”
***
What do you guys think? Too long? Too short? Not much detail? Grammar mistakes? Spelling? Please tell me so I can improve. This is not my first fanfic, I've written a couple before, but I'm a little rusty, so give me all you got.
A side note: English is my second language.
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