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Here's the review I promised.
Chapters 1, 3, and 5:
Ernest is fine as a character. I've seen characters like him that were portrayed a lot worse (Jungle of Bones comes to mind) and I can see his potential to grow. The plot itself is intriguing. The Pokemon have mysteriously gone extinct. The government doesn't want it to be mentioned. Hmm, why do I get the feeling these events are interconnected? That said, I would like to know how the world is still functioning after a mass extinction of the world's main biodiversity. Are there real world animals that are taking over the abandoned niches like bees and butterflies replacing Combee and Butterfree/Beautifly as pollinators for example? This is an area that should really be explored at some point later on.
Chapters 2, 4, and 6:
Kris is very likable and her side of the story's pretty fun. I love how the backstory you've given her pokes through in her decisions and interactions with other characters. Chica and Cinder are filled with personality. Ethan, Professor Elm and the rest of New Bark Town's residents are characterized well. I'm interested on seeing if Kris will be able to accomplish her goal of not using Poke Balls to carry her Pokemon on her journey. I'm also wondering if she was involved in what happened and/or if she'll meet up with Ernest at all.
Overall:
While some areas are clunky, I'm intrigued on seeing where the story will go. I will be ready to read more when you are able to upload.
Chapters 1, 3, and 5:
Ernest is fine as a character. I've seen characters like him that were portrayed a lot worse (Jungle of Bones comes to mind) and I can see his potential to grow. The plot itself is intriguing. The Pokemon have mysteriously gone extinct. The government doesn't want it to be mentioned. Hmm, why do I get the feeling these events are interconnected? That said, I would like to know how the world is still functioning after a mass extinction of the world's main biodiversity. Are there real world animals that are taking over the abandoned niches like bees and butterflies replacing Combee and Butterfree/Beautifly as pollinators for example? This is an area that should really be explored at some point later on.
Chapters 2, 4, and 6:
Kris is very likable and her side of the story's pretty fun. I love how the backstory you've given her pokes through in her decisions and interactions with other characters. Chica and Cinder are filled with personality. Ethan, Professor Elm and the rest of New Bark Town's residents are characterized well. I'm interested on seeing if Kris will be able to accomplish her goal of not using Poke Balls to carry her Pokemon on her journey. I'm also wondering if she was involved in what happened and/or if she'll meet up with Ernest at all.
Overall:
While some areas are clunky, I'm intrigued on seeing where the story will go. I will be ready to read more when you are able to upload.