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Another great chapter! I quite love the use of Jynx with a black face. Personally to me, Jynx should have kept her black face, she looks ugl(ier) with a purple face. One bit of advice: you don't seem to use commas very freqeuntly. Just a suggestion to add a few in to longer sentences.