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Not everyone is a nice as Bates Narr, sadly that is the truth. But hey at least we got to Violet in LESS THAN 10 CHAPTERS which is always a plus maybe you can keep up this pace for a little while. I really liked your description of Violet, it was a bit clunky but it stands out from the usual, plus the fact that you made the city be situated on top of a mountain actually has it make sense with Falkner's flying type theme (Bugsy livs in a town surrounded by forests and nothing says modern and urban like normal types so yeah) Plus you had some pretty good dialogue here between Ely and her Pokemon.
But yeah, that tower is fucking creepy man and that priest is creepy too. It feels more like a cult and I honestly wasn't expecting you to try and go for horror here o.o I mean it came really out of left field for me (and yes it still sounds like a premise for a porn movie too) so I'm kind of wondering what kind of horrible things Ely will have to go through before she can get out (hopefully not a torture chamber a la fifty shades)
Also I'm sorry if this review is too short >.<
But yeah, that tower is fucking creepy man and that priest is creepy too. It feels more like a cult and I honestly wasn't expecting you to try and go for horror here o.o I mean it came really out of left field for me (and yes it still sounds like a premise for a porn movie too) so I'm kind of wondering what kind of horrible things Ely will have to go through before she can get out (hopefully not a torture chamber a la fifty shades)
Also I'm sorry if this review is too short >.<