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Plot:
Almost immediately, we are thrown into an almost PMD-like apocalyptic Pokeworld. While there are some glimpses of what exactly caused the Pokeworld to be like this, the journey here is not so much "be the very best, like no one ever was", but instead as the character's search for answers about the cataclysm. That said, it was hard to follow because of all the weird concepts and species ideas being thrown around. I would've liked some explanation about what all these species and concepts are, so I could better understand it.
Setting:
We know we are in a nearly PMD-like world that got this way due to a cataclysm that wiped out almost all humans, but I mainly wanted to know more about the cataclysm itself, how it happened, and the beings that possibly caused it. I felt a little lost considering that this is part of a series and I haven't read much of the others.
Characterization:
I agree with dp on this one--there's so many characters to keep track of, it's almost a chore remembering who is who. It doesn't help that I haven't read much of the others in the series, so a lot of the references and development flew over my head.
Style:
This is the story's biggest strength, but it is a double-edged sword--it brings the world to life in what seems like a straightfoward manner, but there are so many intricate details woven throughout that it may take several readings just to understand it all. This comes at the cost of confusing those that aren't up to speed, or just haven't read the series in a while.
Technical:
I didn't see any major spelling or grammar errors.
Overall:
This is a very intriguing and interesting story, but it comes at the cost of a barrier to a new reader or a reader that hasn't read the series up to this point. It would help if the story slowed down and brought the audience up to speed a little, but I understand this is difficult to do without coming across as an infodump. That said, it has potential to be something great, and if you can overcome the entry barrier, it is worth the effort.
And Ren's feedback:
Plot
Ren doesn't really stand out very much. He comes across to me as a no-nonsense, resourceful kind of person, and isn't prone to many of the common "last of their kind" tropes, so there's that, at least. Other than that, he's pretty much along for the ride.
Development:
At first Ren is somewhat quiet and reserved, but lately he is beginning to open up to his Pokemon companions. Where this goes from here, only time will tell. I'm interested in finding out more about what he was like before the cataclysm.
Originality:
"Last of their kind" characters have been done a million times before, but Ren thankfully does not fall into many of the stereotypical behaviors these characters tend to have. He is not overly optimistic, nor is he sad and brooding. He just seems to be "there."
Entertainment Value:
Having said that, just being "there" does actually work. He comes across to me as the straight man to everyone else's banter, which creates an interesting repartee and moments of levity in a dark and bleak world.
Contribution to the Plot:
As the last of the humans, of course Ren has some role to play, but what this role is isn't immediately clear at the moment.
Plot:
Almost immediately, we are thrown into an almost PMD-like apocalyptic Pokeworld. While there are some glimpses of what exactly caused the Pokeworld to be like this, the journey here is not so much "be the very best, like no one ever was", but instead as the character's search for answers about the cataclysm. That said, it was hard to follow because of all the weird concepts and species ideas being thrown around. I would've liked some explanation about what all these species and concepts are, so I could better understand it.
Setting:
We know we are in a nearly PMD-like world that got this way due to a cataclysm that wiped out almost all humans, but I mainly wanted to know more about the cataclysm itself, how it happened, and the beings that possibly caused it. I felt a little lost considering that this is part of a series and I haven't read much of the others.
Characterization:
I agree with dp on this one--there's so many characters to keep track of, it's almost a chore remembering who is who. It doesn't help that I haven't read much of the others in the series, so a lot of the references and development flew over my head.
Style:
This is the story's biggest strength, but it is a double-edged sword--it brings the world to life in what seems like a straightfoward manner, but there are so many intricate details woven throughout that it may take several readings just to understand it all. This comes at the cost of confusing those that aren't up to speed, or just haven't read the series in a while.
Technical:
I didn't see any major spelling or grammar errors.
Overall:
This is a very intriguing and interesting story, but it comes at the cost of a barrier to a new reader or a reader that hasn't read the series up to this point. It would help if the story slowed down and brought the audience up to speed a little, but I understand this is difficult to do without coming across as an infodump. That said, it has potential to be something great, and if you can overcome the entry barrier, it is worth the effort.
And Ren's feedback:
Plot
Ren doesn't really stand out very much. He comes across to me as a no-nonsense, resourceful kind of person, and isn't prone to many of the common "last of their kind" tropes, so there's that, at least. Other than that, he's pretty much along for the ride.
Development:
At first Ren is somewhat quiet and reserved, but lately he is beginning to open up to his Pokemon companions. Where this goes from here, only time will tell. I'm interested in finding out more about what he was like before the cataclysm.
Originality:
"Last of their kind" characters have been done a million times before, but Ren thankfully does not fall into many of the stereotypical behaviors these characters tend to have. He is not overly optimistic, nor is he sad and brooding. He just seems to be "there."
Entertainment Value:
Having said that, just being "there" does actually work. He comes across to me as the straight man to everyone else's banter, which creates an interesting repartee and moments of levity in a dark and bleak world.
Contribution to the Plot:
As the last of the humans, of course Ren has some role to play, but what this role is isn't immediately clear at the moment.