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I finally caught up and I honestly feel bad cause I probably won't be able to give that good of a review but I'll try my best so bear with me.
Technical: Your grammar is perfect, there might've been some rough patches back in the first chapter but it was overall great, 100 percent. Your pacing is pretty good too, it's not too quick and at the same time not too slow and the wayyou introduce your characters is pretty good and doesn't seem rushed at all either.
While your description could use some improvement at times it is really well done, when you describes surroundings or appearances I can easily imagine how it looks like, this is because you don't shower us with description but rather give us the key details and let our minds wander; which is a good thing if it's done right, and trust me it was done right in this story.
I shouldn't really comment on your wording xD cause that's where I fall low myself but you, you're really good, I know you like hard words as well as different kinds of words, the good thing is that you were able to use words that could get their point across and that people could understand without repeating them too much.
Plot: I remember Thabet mentioning that it was a furry fic xD and honestly when I first heard that it used Pokemorphs I was like "oh god," and you did follow the usual morph genre cliche of giving them nice bodies and all that.
But, and this goes to anyone that judged this story based on that, you came out of that mold completely as soon as the second chapter, your idea on how Pokemon become morphs is way more original and logical than that of those stories people think it would be, a plot of Pokemorphs teaming up and going on missions, even if we're still gathering the group you can tell that it's going to be great.
I also like how you mix the Pokemorphs own past into this, it isn't just an add on plotline but more that their past and their reasons for being there is also a large part of the plot, it's not just action or fighting or mystery but it also has drama and emotion mixed into it as well.
Characters:Your characters are pretty good, they each have a different and unique personality that differentiates them from the others. Salem is a fish out of water with a hidden past that she doesn't even know
I actually like Dusk xD she seems like a really quirky yet mysterioius character, mostly cause she thinks she's the best of the best and doesn't realize how much people actually dislike her. I don't have much to say about Nathan or Pyre just yet, except that I like the difference between their characters, and I like how Verity is a serious yet knowledgeble character.
But like I said they're all unique and different in their own way and they all have their own problems and flaws. That's another thing, I like how Salem is able to point out other's characteristics while just getting to know them xD I thought it was a pretty good thing to add.
Honestly, I wish I could give you a better review I know my review isn't as good in comparison to Gama's and Feli's but I want you to know three things. I really liked this, I'm sorry for not catching up earlier, and that I'll keep on reading it good work and good luck and you definitily deserve the award of best dark fic, even though it's not that dark xD guess I made a mistake when I nominated it...sorry.
I usually don't give ratings, but I'll make an exception for you.
Overall Rating: 93%
Technical: Your grammar is perfect, there might've been some rough patches back in the first chapter but it was overall great, 100 percent. Your pacing is pretty good too, it's not too quick and at the same time not too slow and the wayyou introduce your characters is pretty good and doesn't seem rushed at all either.
While your description could use some improvement at times it is really well done, when you describes surroundings or appearances I can easily imagine how it looks like, this is because you don't shower us with description but rather give us the key details and let our minds wander; which is a good thing if it's done right, and trust me it was done right in this story.
I shouldn't really comment on your wording xD cause that's where I fall low myself but you, you're really good, I know you like hard words as well as different kinds of words, the good thing is that you were able to use words that could get their point across and that people could understand without repeating them too much.
Plot: I remember Thabet mentioning that it was a furry fic xD and honestly when I first heard that it used Pokemorphs I was like "oh god," and you did follow the usual morph genre cliche of giving them nice bodies and all that.
But, and this goes to anyone that judged this story based on that, you came out of that mold completely as soon as the second chapter, your idea on how Pokemon become morphs is way more original and logical than that of those stories people think it would be, a plot of Pokemorphs teaming up and going on missions, even if we're still gathering the group you can tell that it's going to be great.
I also like how you mix the Pokemorphs own past into this, it isn't just an add on plotline but more that their past and their reasons for being there is also a large part of the plot, it's not just action or fighting or mystery but it also has drama and emotion mixed into it as well.
Characters:Your characters are pretty good, they each have a different and unique personality that differentiates them from the others. Salem is a fish out of water with a hidden past that she doesn't even know
I actually like Dusk xD she seems like a really quirky yet mysterioius character, mostly cause she thinks she's the best of the best and doesn't realize how much people actually dislike her. I don't have much to say about Nathan or Pyre just yet, except that I like the difference between their characters, and I like how Verity is a serious yet knowledgeble character.
But like I said they're all unique and different in their own way and they all have their own problems and flaws. That's another thing, I like how Salem is able to point out other's characteristics while just getting to know them xD I thought it was a pretty good thing to add.
Honestly, I wish I could give you a better review I know my review isn't as good in comparison to Gama's and Feli's but I want you to know three things. I really liked this, I'm sorry for not catching up earlier, and that I'll keep on reading it good work and good luck and you definitily deserve the award of best dark fic, even though it's not that dark xD guess I made a mistake when I nominated it...sorry.
I usually don't give ratings, but I'll make an exception for you.
Overall Rating: 93%