unrepentantAuthor
A cat who writes stories
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Three things to address today!
The first is that the 2018 Summer Awards have ended, and Different Eyes was selected by a panel of judges as the winner of "Best Speculative Fic." Thanks to those who read this story and determined it as the best in its category, thanks to @lucarioknight56 and @WanderingKalosan for nominating DE, and thanks to my regular reviewers for fuelling my motivation!
Secondly, the story now has a wonderful bit of cover art by the fabulously talented and hard working @canisaries. Thanks once again, mate.
Thirdly: Welcome back, @Flaze, and thank you for reading and reviewing. Now that the awards are over and I've settled in to my new house, I feel I can properly reply to your feedback.
No worries, I appreciate you giving it another go this time around.
I love the concept, but I'm first to admit most morph fics leave a lot to be desired. That's part of my motivation for writing DE — to write the proverbial good morph fic.
Thanks, I put a lot of effort into this. It's always good to hear that readers had a good connection with Salem when she's only a cat.
Excellent, I want to twist people's heartstrings whenever possible! ;P
I suppose that's fair, but I didn't want to bloat my chapters too much and so I shunted a lot of that content to the next chapter, which I'm sorry to hear you found disappointing. There's something of a pacing concern at this early part of the story, and I don't want to fill up too much on anything that's not relevant to the major themes and plot points before morphs have been brought front stage.
What I cared the most about in chapter three was demonstrating Salem's difficulties in forming relationships with other domestic pokémon, thus further justifying her decision to accompany Alisha. I admit it's a transitional chapter, but I hope that this, and the exhibition of pokémon intelligence & communication, at least came across amongst the transitional stuff.
Ambiguity was absolutely what I was going for, I'm pleased to hear that Salem's naivety and the seriousness of the looming event don't come across either as strongly ominous or as without cause for concern.
You're the second person to think that Alisha is a scientist. Where did you get that idea, may I ask? She's a recruitment agent who accompanies pokémon to morphing as a familiar face so that they don't panic. She has nothing to do with the morphing research or any medical procedure. I want to be sure that people get the right idea about her.
Great, that was my favourite bit to write, and I'm delighted to have someone comment on it!
The first arc is definitely an odd one. From here on, things will be very different. We're going to see Salem communicating, a stable location, and a network of characters with developing relationships. I hope that as I get into that, you stick around and enjoy it!
Thanks again for giving me your praise and your critique, I appreciate both. Hopefully the next chapter isn't too far away now!
The first is that the 2018 Summer Awards have ended, and Different Eyes was selected by a panel of judges as the winner of "Best Speculative Fic." Thanks to those who read this story and determined it as the best in its category, thanks to @lucarioknight56 and @WanderingKalosan for nominating DE, and thanks to my regular reviewers for fuelling my motivation!
Secondly, the story now has a wonderful bit of cover art by the fabulously talented and hard working @canisaries. Thanks once again, mate.
Thirdly: Welcome back, @Flaze, and thank you for reading and reviewing. Now that the awards are over and I've settled in to my new house, I feel I can properly reply to your feedback.
I actually forgot about this story’s past incarnation
No worries, I appreciate you giving it another go this time around.
I tend to try and avoid Pokemorph stories, if only because they don’t have the best of reputations.
I love the concept, but I'm first to admit most morph fics leave a lot to be desired. That's part of my motivation for writing DE — to write the proverbial good morph fic.
you do a good job of getting into Salem’s mind
Thanks, I put a lot of effort into this. It's always good to hear that readers had a good connection with Salem when she's only a cat.
it’s a bit heartbreaking when it passes to the next scene and Salem is all battered and beaten down.
Excellent, I want to twist people's heartstrings whenever possible! ;P
If there’s one point where I think this chapter falters is that we don’t get to see more of the care center
I suppose that's fair, but I didn't want to bloat my chapters too much and so I shunted a lot of that content to the next chapter, which I'm sorry to hear you found disappointing. There's something of a pacing concern at this early part of the story, and I don't want to fill up too much on anything that's not relevant to the major themes and plot points before morphs have been brought front stage.
I’d have to say that this one felt a lot more like an transition chapter to get us from the care center to the lab. The description here isn’t bad but it doesn’t flow as well
What I cared the most about in chapter three was demonstrating Salem's difficulties in forming relationships with other domestic pokémon, thus further justifying her decision to accompany Alisha. I admit it's a transitional chapter, but I hope that this, and the exhibition of pokémon intelligence & communication, at least came across amongst the transitional stuff.
I liked chapter 4 much more, particularly for how it builds up this feeling of uncertainty.
Ambiguity was absolutely what I was going for, I'm pleased to hear that Salem's naivety and the seriousness of the looming event don't come across either as strongly ominous or as without cause for concern.
I was afraid she’d be a cold scientist masking her intent with a smile
You're the second person to think that Alisha is a scientist. Where did you get that idea, may I ask? She's a recruitment agent who accompanies pokémon to morphing as a familiar face so that they don't panic. She has nothing to do with the morphing research or any medical procedure. I want to be sure that people get the right idea about her.
I particularly liked how you describe the feeling she had when crying the first time
Great, that was my favourite bit to write, and I'm delighted to have someone comment on it!
I think Different Eyes is just getting started, but we’ve gotten a pretty good look at Salem in this first arc. Overall it isn’t a bad thing, giving us a first arc that functions as an introduction to the characters and the world. I would like to see it in more detail moving forward without it necessarily having to be explained in outside notes though. Also, I hope that now that Salem is a hybrid we can get some more meaningful interactions between her and other characters and actually get to know other characters a little better.
The first arc is definitely an odd one. From here on, things will be very different. We're going to see Salem communicating, a stable location, and a network of characters with developing relationships. I hope that as I get into that, you stick around and enjoy it!
Thanks again for giving me your praise and your critique, I appreciate both. Hopefully the next chapter isn't too far away now!