Chapter 43 - Aftermath
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@Rediamond; Suuuuuuper helpful review. Thanks so much! You actually convinced me to touch up the earlier chapters. I'm not sure how far I'll go, but you bring up a few things that I've been desperately trying to retcon and it would be better to just establish them early and meet in the middle. I want Keith to be less of an invincible character and more of a constantly scraping by on the skin of his teeth character. This may sound stupid, but his defeat-ability or lack thereof is an important part of where I plan to go with his character. As he is now, he is kind of boring and that's something I'll try to fix with the rewrites. I totally get where you're coming from with Criss as well and I absolutely agree with you (had she actually won Best Character I would have posted a rant about why that was undeserved with the next chapter, I'm glad that others agree with me). Her character will change substantially in the next few chapters and onward, so there's that as well. But anyway, thanks again for the review. One of the most helpful I've had!
@Flaze; I'm honestly not sure why I thought the first half of that chapter was so important. It kind of helped with building up the Spencer vs Nolan dynamic but that wasn't terribly vital in the end and could have been done in much less space. I actually invented Reese as the villain that would die here, but then I came up with a better way for him to fit in to the long term story. Unfortunately by then it was too late to come up with another symbolic baddie to kill off. Thanks for the feedback, I really appreciate it.
This one's a bit shorter than usual.
This time: The aftermath of the Battle of Saffron
Chapter 43
I know I dreamed while I was out after the explosion on Silph Tower, but I don’t remember what of. I could only grasp at flashes of feeling and emotion. It was like a huge plug had been pulled out of me, and all of my anger and decisiveness and burning passion was slowly draining away. It was a relief, since I was so very, very tired. I could have drifted forever in that land of unknowing, in that mist of unfeeling peace.
Who was I? Why did I exist? Did I exist? What is existing, really?
But then, as suddenly as it had left, reality returned. White light dominated my vision as my eyes slowly opened. I blinked, remembering.
I am Keith Daniel Anders. I’m from Pallet Town and I’ve always wanted to have my very own Dragonite. I am on a journey to become Champion of the Indigo Pokémon League. Slowly but surely, the events of my life came flooding back to me, all the way up to the battle against Project Titan and its catastrophic conclusion.
So where was I now?
I looked around. The blinding light was beginning to fade, and my surroundings began to come in to focus.
I was lying in a small bed under clean white sheets. It dawned on me that I was in a hospital when I saw the other beds beside mine. I shifted slightly in an attempt to push myself upright. Bad idea.
Everything hurt. My muscles felt like they had whaled on with a meat tenderizer. My neck and elbows were stiff, and I didn’t even bother trying to bend my knees. The most impressive feat of strength I could pull off was curling my fingers into a weak fist.
A small tube ran from a bag of clear liquid suspended above my head down to my inner elbow and I didn’t really want to think about the remarkably uncomfortable sensation between my legs.
“Keith?” a familiar voice came from the bed next to mine.
I looked over. “Tim?” my voice came out like a whisper, my throat was so dry.
“How do you feel?” Tim looked a little bruised, and his dirt-colored hair was more unkempt than usual, but he looked like he was in good spirits at least.
Before I could respond, a portly nurse carrying a clipboard walked in to the room. Seeing I was awake, she rushed over to me and asked the same question as Tim.
“Tired,” I rasped. “Sore.” Single word sentences were definitely the way to go.
“You’re Keith Anders, correct?” the nurse asked.
I attempted to nod, but my stiff neck refused to cooperate. “Yeah,” I said instead.
She began inspecting some of the machines I was hooked up to and jotting things down on her clipboard. “Your brother got everything figured out when he brought you in, so luckily you don’t have to worry about any forms.”
“My brother?” I asked.
“Mhm, he brought the two of you in two days ago,” she responded.
I’d been out two whole days?
“Is he okay?”
“Oh, yes. I’m sure he’ll be in to visit before long.”
That was a relief. I knew that Spencer had gone out to Celadon to talk with the police force there, but I wondered if he had entered the city with them. I had no idea how Spencer would cope in a fight.
The nurse asked me a few more questions about how I felt and when I had woken up. When she was done, she tucked her pen into a breast pocket.
“Alright,” she said, scanning her clipboard. “You’ve got some minor burns, muscle strains, a concussion, and some cuts and bruises, but everything’s all cleaned up and taken care of. I think you’ll be fine after a couple days’ rest. You’ll probably be able to get up and walk around tomorrow, but we might have to keep you here under painkillers for another day after that.”
On one hand, anything less than an eternity of bed rest seemed like insufficient treatment, but on the other hand, I was eager to see what was going on in the outside world. “Okay thanks,” I choked out. The nurse shuffled off to look after a patient in another bed.
I tried my best to look around the room, but I didn’t see anyone else I recognized. I looked at Tim. “What happened?” I asked.
He smirked and shrugged painfully. “Team Rocket was kicked out of the city two days ago and now we’re in Saffron Hospital,” he said. “I just woke up this morning, so I don’t know much more than you.”
I looked at the ceiling. “I… I remember fighting that monster.” Words were coming more easily now. “And then it exploded… why did it explode?”
“Beats me,” Tim said. “My guess is that Psyke psychically protected us from the brunt of it, though.”
I thought about the fight on the tower, and then I suddenly began to panic. “Where’s Criss? Where are our Pokémon?”
The nurse answered before Tim could. “Your Pokémon have been sent to the makeshift clinic for treatment. It’s all documented; you shouldn’t have a problem retrieving them once you’re up and about.”
“What about Criss?” I insisted. “Tall, dark hair, would have been brought in with us.”
“Honey,” she replied, “there have been thousands of injured since the retaking, and more are discovered every day. I’m busy enough keeping up with the ones in my ward. Once you’re up and about, you can look her up.”
With a worried sigh, I closed my eyes and tried to get back to sleep. Despite the metric ton of stress I felt, it was surprisingly easy.
*****
My brother visited later that day, after a tasteless yet satisfying dinner. I perked up as the nurse showed him in.
Spencer looked incredibly tired. His short hair was messy and he had large dark bags under his eyes. His clothes were a stark contrast: a crisp suit and purple and red tie. He had the air of someone desperately trying to keep up appearances despite immense levels of stress.
The look of relief on his face when he saw me slowly hardened as he sat down on a stool between my bed and Tim’s.
“Would you mind telling me what the hell you’re doing here?” he almost growled.
“Hello to you too,” I said. Normally I wouldn’t be a smartass in a situation like this, but the pain medication I was on made me feel a little bold.
Spencer just glared in response.
“What? You’re the one that brought us here.”
“That’s not what I meant,” my brother said. “I mean why did you come to Saffron? You know how dangerous that was!”
I shrugged. “Yeah, and we came anyway. Criss said-“
“Oh, so you followed her here,” Spencer interrupted, leaning back with a frown.
In my mind I saw Reese smirking at me. “I’m surprised she convinced you to throw your life away. But then… she learned manipulation from the best.”
I frowned right back at my brother. “I chose to come here because I thought it was the right thing to do.”
“The right thing to do?” Spencer shouted.
The nurse, tending to a patient on the far side of the room, turned around. “If you can’t keep it down I’m going to have to ask you to leave.”
Spencer ignored her.
“Look,” I said, “I don’t understand why you’re so upset…”
“Upset?” he roared. “I didn’t even know if you were alive! I had to drag my brother’s comatose body from the still smoking rubble! How could I not be upset?”
“Now, really!” the nurse huffed, starting towards us.
But Spencer had already gotten up and stormed out of the ward.
I looked at Tim. His face was unreadable.
I turned over and closed my eyes. This time sleep did not come so easily.
*****
Criss was alive.
“I’m afraid I can’t tell you much, besides the fact that she’s in the ICU,” the receptionist said. “Privacy laws and all that. But she should be ready to receive visitors soon. Ask me again tomorrow.”
“Thanks,” I said. “I’ll do that.”
That was somewhat good news at least, I thought to myself as I gingerly walked through the crowded hospital waiting room. Criss being in the intensive care unit wasn’t a huge surprise given how badly she had been beaten up. At least she was okay for now.
I had been discharged earlier that morning, not long after Tim. I was still pretty sore and more than a little woozy, but the three days of rest had helped considerably.
As I approached, the automatic doors slid open and let me out into the outside world for the first time in days. The first thing that hit me was the heat. It was like a hot summer day had gotten lost on its way to August and somehow ended up in April. It was probably for the best, given all I was wearing was a T-shirt and shorts. Apparently Spencer had taken the rest of my belongings. I’d probably have to go get those from him before long, but I certainly wasn’t looking forward to seeing my brother again.
The street outside the hospital was surprisingly plain. I don’t know if I expected more craters and burnt out buildings, but the quaint birch trees lining the road and rustling softly in the warm breeze were a far cry from the chaos of the city four days before. A fair number of people hurried about their business, their faces taut. No one spoke to each other, not even a casual greeting.
Trying not to think about what I’d say to Spencer when I next saw him, I headed down the street and looked at the palm of my hand, where I had scrawled the address the nurse had given me of the Pokémon medical clinic that had been set up until the Pokémon Center could be rebuilt. I had agreed to meet Tim there after we had each picked up our Pokémon.
The farther I got from the hospital the more I realized how bad of a shape the city was in. I passed several collapsed buildings, most of which had simply been cordoned off and left for later. There were plenty of people walking the streets, but it stayed quiet except for the sounds of construction machinery in the distance. No one said a word and I saw more than one tear-stained face. It was hard not to think of how I would feel if Team Rocket had done this to my home town. I imagined Pallet Town’s wharfs collapsed, its quaint little coffee shops ablaze, and bodies littering the potholed streets. Even just in my imagination, I felt violated. Home is a place where people feel safe. A place they are familiar with. And now home would remind all of these people of the most terrible days of their lives. I looked at my feet.
Besides the nurse’s cryptic comments about how busy the hospital was, I hadn’t gotten a real number when it came to casualties until this morning when I had looked at a newspaper on the waiting room table. Almost three thousand deaths and six thousand wounded accounted for so far, police, civilian, and Rocket alike. In our rush to get to the tower, I hadn’t realized how bad the fighting was. I struggled to wrap my head around it. Three thousand people.
I looked up in time to see my way was blocked by cleanup crews clearing rubble from the street. I looked at the nearest street sign to get my bearings and took a detour. When I turned the next corner, I found the most crowded street yet. A fleet of hearses lined the road, more than I had the heart to count. The first building I passed was an actual funeral home, but it seemed like the rest of the street had been converted. Every single office complex, apartment, house, and shop was filled with mourners. Their doors were propped open due to the heat, allowing me quick glimpses of the funeral services inside each building I passed. I caught brief snippets of speech, photographs of the dead, memories being shared. They tugged at my heartstrings, but I didn’t stop until I heard the tinkling of piano keys and a soft feminine voice singing from inside what looked like a used bookstore.
I slowed to a halt and looked inside. A dark coffin lay at the end of the room, covered in lilies. A picture was propped up on a frame next to it, showing a young girl with blonde hair and freckles who couldn’t have been any older than ten. The girl who was singing on the makeshift stage beside it looked so similar they had to be sisters. Had to have been sisters. I grimaced with empathy.
I leaned against the doorframe and listened to her gentle singing. Everyone gathered in the folding metal chairs, some thirty or so people, were facing the girl, so she was the only one who saw me standing there. We made brief eye contact, which I quickly broke, looking down at my feet and listening to the last mournful lines of her song.
“No, I didn’t pray to God.
No, I never saw the light.
No, I didn’t watch my life go flashing right before my eyes.
No, I didn’t do the things that they all said that I would do.
I just closed my eyes and all I saw was you.”
*****
NEXT: Explanations...
So on Rediamond's suggestion, I'm doing some minor-ish rewrites of the earlier chapters to fix technical mistakes as well as a few other things. Most of the important content won't change, but if I ever make references to specific events from the early chapters, I will be referencing the newer versions. Feel free to re-read if you'd like.
Thanks for reading!
@Rediamond; Suuuuuuper helpful review. Thanks so much! You actually convinced me to touch up the earlier chapters. I'm not sure how far I'll go, but you bring up a few things that I've been desperately trying to retcon and it would be better to just establish them early and meet in the middle. I want Keith to be less of an invincible character and more of a constantly scraping by on the skin of his teeth character. This may sound stupid, but his defeat-ability or lack thereof is an important part of where I plan to go with his character. As he is now, he is kind of boring and that's something I'll try to fix with the rewrites. I totally get where you're coming from with Criss as well and I absolutely agree with you (had she actually won Best Character I would have posted a rant about why that was undeserved with the next chapter, I'm glad that others agree with me). Her character will change substantially in the next few chapters and onward, so there's that as well. But anyway, thanks again for the review. One of the most helpful I've had!
@Flaze; I'm honestly not sure why I thought the first half of that chapter was so important. It kind of helped with building up the Spencer vs Nolan dynamic but that wasn't terribly vital in the end and could have been done in much less space. I actually invented Reese as the villain that would die here, but then I came up with a better way for him to fit in to the long term story. Unfortunately by then it was too late to come up with another symbolic baddie to kill off. Thanks for the feedback, I really appreciate it.
This one's a bit shorter than usual.
This time: The aftermath of the Battle of Saffron
Chapter 43
I know I dreamed while I was out after the explosion on Silph Tower, but I don’t remember what of. I could only grasp at flashes of feeling and emotion. It was like a huge plug had been pulled out of me, and all of my anger and decisiveness and burning passion was slowly draining away. It was a relief, since I was so very, very tired. I could have drifted forever in that land of unknowing, in that mist of unfeeling peace.
Who was I? Why did I exist? Did I exist? What is existing, really?
But then, as suddenly as it had left, reality returned. White light dominated my vision as my eyes slowly opened. I blinked, remembering.
I am Keith Daniel Anders. I’m from Pallet Town and I’ve always wanted to have my very own Dragonite. I am on a journey to become Champion of the Indigo Pokémon League. Slowly but surely, the events of my life came flooding back to me, all the way up to the battle against Project Titan and its catastrophic conclusion.
So where was I now?
I looked around. The blinding light was beginning to fade, and my surroundings began to come in to focus.
I was lying in a small bed under clean white sheets. It dawned on me that I was in a hospital when I saw the other beds beside mine. I shifted slightly in an attempt to push myself upright. Bad idea.
Everything hurt. My muscles felt like they had whaled on with a meat tenderizer. My neck and elbows were stiff, and I didn’t even bother trying to bend my knees. The most impressive feat of strength I could pull off was curling my fingers into a weak fist.
A small tube ran from a bag of clear liquid suspended above my head down to my inner elbow and I didn’t really want to think about the remarkably uncomfortable sensation between my legs.
“Keith?” a familiar voice came from the bed next to mine.
I looked over. “Tim?” my voice came out like a whisper, my throat was so dry.
“How do you feel?” Tim looked a little bruised, and his dirt-colored hair was more unkempt than usual, but he looked like he was in good spirits at least.
Before I could respond, a portly nurse carrying a clipboard walked in to the room. Seeing I was awake, she rushed over to me and asked the same question as Tim.
“Tired,” I rasped. “Sore.” Single word sentences were definitely the way to go.
“You’re Keith Anders, correct?” the nurse asked.
I attempted to nod, but my stiff neck refused to cooperate. “Yeah,” I said instead.
She began inspecting some of the machines I was hooked up to and jotting things down on her clipboard. “Your brother got everything figured out when he brought you in, so luckily you don’t have to worry about any forms.”
“My brother?” I asked.
“Mhm, he brought the two of you in two days ago,” she responded.
I’d been out two whole days?
“Is he okay?”
“Oh, yes. I’m sure he’ll be in to visit before long.”
That was a relief. I knew that Spencer had gone out to Celadon to talk with the police force there, but I wondered if he had entered the city with them. I had no idea how Spencer would cope in a fight.
The nurse asked me a few more questions about how I felt and when I had woken up. When she was done, she tucked her pen into a breast pocket.
“Alright,” she said, scanning her clipboard. “You’ve got some minor burns, muscle strains, a concussion, and some cuts and bruises, but everything’s all cleaned up and taken care of. I think you’ll be fine after a couple days’ rest. You’ll probably be able to get up and walk around tomorrow, but we might have to keep you here under painkillers for another day after that.”
On one hand, anything less than an eternity of bed rest seemed like insufficient treatment, but on the other hand, I was eager to see what was going on in the outside world. “Okay thanks,” I choked out. The nurse shuffled off to look after a patient in another bed.
I tried my best to look around the room, but I didn’t see anyone else I recognized. I looked at Tim. “What happened?” I asked.
He smirked and shrugged painfully. “Team Rocket was kicked out of the city two days ago and now we’re in Saffron Hospital,” he said. “I just woke up this morning, so I don’t know much more than you.”
I looked at the ceiling. “I… I remember fighting that monster.” Words were coming more easily now. “And then it exploded… why did it explode?”
“Beats me,” Tim said. “My guess is that Psyke psychically protected us from the brunt of it, though.”
I thought about the fight on the tower, and then I suddenly began to panic. “Where’s Criss? Where are our Pokémon?”
The nurse answered before Tim could. “Your Pokémon have been sent to the makeshift clinic for treatment. It’s all documented; you shouldn’t have a problem retrieving them once you’re up and about.”
“What about Criss?” I insisted. “Tall, dark hair, would have been brought in with us.”
“Honey,” she replied, “there have been thousands of injured since the retaking, and more are discovered every day. I’m busy enough keeping up with the ones in my ward. Once you’re up and about, you can look her up.”
With a worried sigh, I closed my eyes and tried to get back to sleep. Despite the metric ton of stress I felt, it was surprisingly easy.
*****
My brother visited later that day, after a tasteless yet satisfying dinner. I perked up as the nurse showed him in.
Spencer looked incredibly tired. His short hair was messy and he had large dark bags under his eyes. His clothes were a stark contrast: a crisp suit and purple and red tie. He had the air of someone desperately trying to keep up appearances despite immense levels of stress.
The look of relief on his face when he saw me slowly hardened as he sat down on a stool between my bed and Tim’s.
“Would you mind telling me what the hell you’re doing here?” he almost growled.
“Hello to you too,” I said. Normally I wouldn’t be a smartass in a situation like this, but the pain medication I was on made me feel a little bold.
Spencer just glared in response.
“What? You’re the one that brought us here.”
“That’s not what I meant,” my brother said. “I mean why did you come to Saffron? You know how dangerous that was!”
I shrugged. “Yeah, and we came anyway. Criss said-“
“Oh, so you followed her here,” Spencer interrupted, leaning back with a frown.
In my mind I saw Reese smirking at me. “I’m surprised she convinced you to throw your life away. But then… she learned manipulation from the best.”
I frowned right back at my brother. “I chose to come here because I thought it was the right thing to do.”
“The right thing to do?” Spencer shouted.
The nurse, tending to a patient on the far side of the room, turned around. “If you can’t keep it down I’m going to have to ask you to leave.”
Spencer ignored her.
“Look,” I said, “I don’t understand why you’re so upset…”
“Upset?” he roared. “I didn’t even know if you were alive! I had to drag my brother’s comatose body from the still smoking rubble! How could I not be upset?”
“Now, really!” the nurse huffed, starting towards us.
But Spencer had already gotten up and stormed out of the ward.
I looked at Tim. His face was unreadable.
I turned over and closed my eyes. This time sleep did not come so easily.
*****
Criss was alive.
“I’m afraid I can’t tell you much, besides the fact that she’s in the ICU,” the receptionist said. “Privacy laws and all that. But she should be ready to receive visitors soon. Ask me again tomorrow.”
“Thanks,” I said. “I’ll do that.”
That was somewhat good news at least, I thought to myself as I gingerly walked through the crowded hospital waiting room. Criss being in the intensive care unit wasn’t a huge surprise given how badly she had been beaten up. At least she was okay for now.
I had been discharged earlier that morning, not long after Tim. I was still pretty sore and more than a little woozy, but the three days of rest had helped considerably.
As I approached, the automatic doors slid open and let me out into the outside world for the first time in days. The first thing that hit me was the heat. It was like a hot summer day had gotten lost on its way to August and somehow ended up in April. It was probably for the best, given all I was wearing was a T-shirt and shorts. Apparently Spencer had taken the rest of my belongings. I’d probably have to go get those from him before long, but I certainly wasn’t looking forward to seeing my brother again.
The street outside the hospital was surprisingly plain. I don’t know if I expected more craters and burnt out buildings, but the quaint birch trees lining the road and rustling softly in the warm breeze were a far cry from the chaos of the city four days before. A fair number of people hurried about their business, their faces taut. No one spoke to each other, not even a casual greeting.
Trying not to think about what I’d say to Spencer when I next saw him, I headed down the street and looked at the palm of my hand, where I had scrawled the address the nurse had given me of the Pokémon medical clinic that had been set up until the Pokémon Center could be rebuilt. I had agreed to meet Tim there after we had each picked up our Pokémon.
The farther I got from the hospital the more I realized how bad of a shape the city was in. I passed several collapsed buildings, most of which had simply been cordoned off and left for later. There were plenty of people walking the streets, but it stayed quiet except for the sounds of construction machinery in the distance. No one said a word and I saw more than one tear-stained face. It was hard not to think of how I would feel if Team Rocket had done this to my home town. I imagined Pallet Town’s wharfs collapsed, its quaint little coffee shops ablaze, and bodies littering the potholed streets. Even just in my imagination, I felt violated. Home is a place where people feel safe. A place they are familiar with. And now home would remind all of these people of the most terrible days of their lives. I looked at my feet.
Besides the nurse’s cryptic comments about how busy the hospital was, I hadn’t gotten a real number when it came to casualties until this morning when I had looked at a newspaper on the waiting room table. Almost three thousand deaths and six thousand wounded accounted for so far, police, civilian, and Rocket alike. In our rush to get to the tower, I hadn’t realized how bad the fighting was. I struggled to wrap my head around it. Three thousand people.
I looked up in time to see my way was blocked by cleanup crews clearing rubble from the street. I looked at the nearest street sign to get my bearings and took a detour. When I turned the next corner, I found the most crowded street yet. A fleet of hearses lined the road, more than I had the heart to count. The first building I passed was an actual funeral home, but it seemed like the rest of the street had been converted. Every single office complex, apartment, house, and shop was filled with mourners. Their doors were propped open due to the heat, allowing me quick glimpses of the funeral services inside each building I passed. I caught brief snippets of speech, photographs of the dead, memories being shared. They tugged at my heartstrings, but I didn’t stop until I heard the tinkling of piano keys and a soft feminine voice singing from inside what looked like a used bookstore.
I slowed to a halt and looked inside. A dark coffin lay at the end of the room, covered in lilies. A picture was propped up on a frame next to it, showing a young girl with blonde hair and freckles who couldn’t have been any older than ten. The girl who was singing on the makeshift stage beside it looked so similar they had to be sisters. Had to have been sisters. I grimaced with empathy.
I leaned against the doorframe and listened to her gentle singing. Everyone gathered in the folding metal chairs, some thirty or so people, were facing the girl, so she was the only one who saw me standing there. We made brief eye contact, which I quickly broke, looking down at my feet and listening to the last mournful lines of her song.
“No, I didn’t pray to God.
No, I never saw the light.
No, I didn’t watch my life go flashing right before my eyes.
No, I didn’t do the things that they all said that I would do.
I just closed my eyes and all I saw was you.”
*****
NEXT: Explanations...
So on Rediamond's suggestion, I'm doing some minor-ish rewrites of the earlier chapters to fix technical mistakes as well as a few other things. Most of the important content won't change, but if I ever make references to specific events from the early chapters, I will be referencing the newer versions. Feel free to re-read if you'd like.
Thanks for reading!
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