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Interesting plot. For starters:
1. Grammar, spelling: I assume English is not your first language, or at least your spellcheck is shot.
2. Exposition: we probably need to know why Archie, Maxie, Cyrus, and Giovanni are acting this way. Especially Archie and Maxie.
3. Cyrus: he's acting a bit too... friendly. Cyrus doesn't like to show his emotions, so all his cheerfulness makes me think that this isn't Cyrus.
However, there are several very amusing lines in this fic ("my Pokemon is so big and heavy and yours is just a light weight bat" is very amusing).
Of course, no offense.
I'll agree with Battle Droid--I want to know why the team leaders are acting OOC, especially Cyrus.
(OOC=Out of Character in RP speak)
Good chapter, Most of what I would say has already been metioned like OOC and maybe some grammar.
Be sure to check spelling, Aerial Ace was spelled wrong for instance.
I liked the chapter a lot though. Keep 'em comin'.
Im loving you poll atm
Best Fic Ever 9,000
Good 4,000
Its alright 1,000
Very.. Suspicious
Team Rocket vs. Team Galactic....This is interesting.
What in the Johto? Your poll was tampered with. There aren't that many active users on here. Umm.... yeah. Kinda confusing. You kept calling Nidoqueen Nidoking. And the ending was really confusing. You might want to proof read.
This chapter was good except two things I noticed. You put 'has' instead of 'as', and also called Nidoqueen Nidoking.
Oh Alster, what of what have you done to the poll? :/
That was much better. I will go along with the others and say Cyrus was a bit emotional, but you're definitely getting there, man. Keep going, you'll only get better.
The last chapter is next.
Anyway, I really like the plot.
A lot of mispelling and tense problems in this story.
But I like it.