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Hey all, thought I would just let you know that I'm officially moving this to a monthly rather than weekly update so I can keep up with it while still managing other aspects of my life - first Monday of the month is the new update day :)

@Ambyssin Thanks very much for the review and sorry that the pacing of this chapter seems to have undermined a lot of the enjoyability for you. I think I am starting to find a bit tricky to balance giving readers enough understanding of what's happening to stay engaged and enjoying against...

Chapter 7 – Reunion Max and Frankie desperately clung on to each other’s bodies as they barely held themselves in place on Magneton whizzing above Johto at a frightening speed. Will supported himself on top of the central head seemingly effortlessly. He must have done this before. They were so...

Sorry again for the hiatus, folks. It's been a rough month. Anyway, Chapter 7 is finally here, and I'm hoping to get back to my weekly schedule from here on out! Wish me luck! Chapter 7 incoming :)

Hey all, thanks so much for your comments! Unfortunately it looks like the hiatus is going to continue a little longer, but I've at least been able to start making serious progress again so I don't think it'll be much longer. After that, I should be able to re-establish the weekly schedule...

Chapter 6 – Interrogation Curtains entered the dilapidated throne room, gently closing the door behind him. He slowly approached the dirty throne, and placed himself on it. He chuckled to himself. This was going to be a good night. Ever since he had been promoted to Deputy, he had been looking...

Thanks very much for the reviews guys! @Ambyssin Pleased to hear that you enjoyed the revelations and events around Spike and the WIB! Given that I think you should also enjoy Monday's chapter. Regarding Gardo, what I was going for was that his thoughts returned to a time when he was more...

Chapter 5 – Goldenrod Academy’s Finest ‘Well, well, well, what do we have here?’ Spike laughed as he sat sprawled across the throne in the middle of the dilapidated room. His Weavile stood next to him, sharpening its claws. Behind Max and Frankie, Curtains could be heard chuckling to himself...

Hi @Beth Pavell thank you very much for the review! Glad you liked both the reality of the mugging and the initial young Pokemon battle. Your comment about stinginess with plot is really helpful. On reflection, I think you're right here. Chapter 5 will be published on Monday as planned and I...

@Ambyssin Thanks very much for your review! Glad you enjoyed Max redeeming himself somewhat and also the fast paced training followed by the encounter with Curtains. The latter was something I was a bit conscious might not come off right since I know it is a bit unusual - I felt like it served...

Chapter 4 – Training Montage Rays of strong sunlight peeked through the trees overlooking the grassy Route 32 outside the Ruins of Alph, and warmed the back of Max’s neck. He stood a few feet behind Bulbasaur. Opposite them, Frankie attempted to coax Squirtle off his leg. ‘Come...

@Ambyssin Thanks very much for your review! I'm glad you enjoyed the sport-style gym match! That's quickly becoming the most commented on thing in this story, so I will have to be sure to give similar features airtime! Thanks for your comments on the brothers. I can see what you mean about...

Thanks for your comment @unrepentantAuthor I appreciate the technical points: think you're right about paw v hand and on "Aaron, your husband". The idea of Terry being six foot in girth is a bit troubling - I suppose I didn't choose my words too carefully with that one! My intention is for him...

Chapter 3 – Out of our Depth Lydia opened the front door to reveal two fully uniformed police officers. One was a tall woman with shaved blonde hair and the other a short woman with long black hair. ‘Oh, hello officers! I wasn’t expecting you until tomorrow. Thank you so much for...

@Beth Pavell Thank you for taking the time to review Ch1. Glad you've found this to have progressed from Fuji - I've tried to incorporate the helpful feedback I got on that story (including that kindly given by yourself). I'm also pleased in particular that you've found the references to a...

Hey @unrepentantAuthor great to see you here and thanks for the review! If my story does nothing but encourage you to return to Bulbagarden I will be very happy with what it's achieved :) Glad you enjoyed and thanks very much for the points for improvement. I'm just finishing off editing for...

Hey @lucarioknight56 thanks so much for taking the time to read and review! :) Firstly, I'm glad you enjoyed the story and are keen to read more - I'll be very interested to see what you think of upcoming chapters. (Chapter 3 will be published on Monday.) Thanks very much for the feedback re...

Chapter 2 – New Beginnings Max tossed and turned in bed. Sleep would not come, only an isolation that he had not felt since the day his dad disappeared. Usually Espeon’s psychic link let him feel the presence of his whole family and their Pokémon as he fell asleep, but now it was gone. All that...

Interesting insight! I'll be sure to keep it in mind for future situations. I think you're right. Thanks for reading and replying! I don't think that sucked as a review in the slightest, and I always think it's nice to hear people's thoughts on your stories regardless of whether that comes as...

Chapter 1 – Rise & Fall ‘Here we go, Bob. Everything comes down to this. You can hear the excitement in this crowd! Will Wynne and Bugsy down to one Pokémon each! You don’t often see matches this close!’ ‘Close it may be, John, but Will is gonna show no mercy from here on out...