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If only it were so easy to find this balance... Solonn needs this balance, I think, or I have a feeling he'd crumble under the weight of all the terrible things that have happened - and will happen - to him. Creepy, and so wrong. But I like it. Oh, Solonn... It sounds like being a moral...

Okay, let's see if I can leave a review without pasting something embarrassing... I think it would've been a bit more beneficial to focus on Solonn here, but I'm torn because it's not like Oth has had a stable amount of characterization so far. Hmm. Have I ever mentioned how much I love the...

I feel like I should make this happen somehow.

Ugh, sorry, my copy/paste didn't work obviously. XD I stopped mid-way to make a note for LaON, and that happened. WILL READ THE CHAPTER ASAP THIS IS WHAT I MEANT TO QUOTE BTW

Seems strange to start a chapter with "the next thing" when there's nothing described previously, but that might just be me. The overarching premise of the sentence, though, is interesting. Just a bit? That's strange - Solonn usually reacts really strongly. He must be all out of wack as a...

Not sure if I know what the bit after the dash means. : ( Also, is this Jal’tai’s POV? I hope so. I miss him already. Powerful sentence right there, I have to say. Solonn’s such a complicated character. I love it. When Solonn thinks about this happening [i]and he was reveling in the situation...

I really like the way you're comparing Solonn's life to Morgan's. How many authors can say they can do that with their characters? I wonder if there'll be any consequences for that kind of dependency. Fits in well with Solonn's character, though WORDS ARE POWERFUL THINGS Nice bit of...

When I read that top part, I thought, "The next few lines are going to make Jal'tai look like a jerk." And so they did. This line just inspired me to make a smoothie today. Really like Solonn's characterization here, particularly the italicized words. Seems like some of Solonn's resentment...

The whole italicized sequence feels like some bad dream, whch I imagine is what you were going for, given Solonn's state in the last chapter. It's very surreal and leaves me wondering what happens to Solonn next, because my god, he's been to hell and back it seems. My only complaint is that I'd...

Is he hugging Solonn right before hurting the hell out of him? Damnit. You're killing me. I love this description. So serene when the situation is anything BUT serene! HE COULD WHAT "Dearly" is something Jal'tai would say, which makes this scene all the more heartbreaking. Multisensory...

No problem. You might want to mention the psychic-type's differences somewhere in the fic. I could easily see other readers assuming what I did. I suppose I should ask - is The Origin of Storms part of this series?

I'm sure Solonn had a -blast- trying to be civil. XD With all the ideas explored here, this could have easily been a complicated, hard to read sentence, but the way you word it is perfect. I also like how you refer to him as a man. HE'S EVIL! RUN AWAY! Strange that "mission" is italicized...

Ohh, this is pretty description and is worded wonderfully. Pretty accurate feeling of what happens under great stress, I'd say. The paragraph's a bit disorganized. You go back and forth from mentioning the physical, then mental aspects. Also, the last sentence seems out of place, since...

Because the difference is really so obvious, am I right? I like the phrase "pained hiss," though I think it sounds better as "with a pained hiss". I don't think there is such as a thing as a "satisfying answer" in this situation. In any case, I do like the way you show Solonn's reluctance...

I will accept your line of reasoning. I suppose I just thought it would have been another way to accentuate Solonn's situation, since a blatant sign of losing his elemental powers probably involves warmth.

I feel like a little better sentence structure could have made this opening part more powerful. I'm not sure what's wrong with it though, or how to fix it. There's a lot of emotion packed into this one, small scene. Not saying it's bad, and in fact, I love it. I feel for Solonn here and really...

No problem, my dear. :P Sorry I couldn't get this to you until after the awards were over. Now get back to writing and being interested in cute lil glalies!

From the awards... SOLONN FROM COMMUNICATION BY SIKE SANER Depth - 6/10 There's not a lot of depth to Solonn. There are very few things I learned about him while reading, and yet the story is from his point of view. The story is about him trying to get back to his secluded mountain home, but...

Cute image. Solonn sounds like an old man. Shut up, Solonn. Lol, that's a cute ending sentence to the paragraph that really shows off how clueless he is. There's lots of wonderful things you can do with pokemon characters, and I think you took advantage of it here. Also, I forgot to quote the...

The description in this opening paragraph is very simply, but the way you explain Solonn's actions at the same time kinda makes it cool. I guess that's one way to avoid hunting. Solonn has a right to be worried, since I remember him fretting about it in the past as a snorunt. "ignoring" not...