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Hi, yes, it's me again, with post-awards feedback this time for the eligible chapters. :P Plot This story's just getting off the ground, so there's not much of one yet. Arthus (an antagonist from previous works in the series) is released from his confinement after 1,000 years or so, then...

I like the worldbuilding here with the pokedex. It seems like an important device that'll be used in the long run - which was proven to me when it gets time for Lawrence to be turned into a pokemon and the only item that made it through the wormhole with him was his pokedex. It's clear he relies...

Like this description a lot. In general, your description seems to have improved by a fair amount. Your writing style feels tighter, flows better, and doesn't feel melodramatic quite as often. The pacing in the prologue feels a bit fast for me - particularly at the four year time gap - but I...