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Thanks for the feedback. As I am in the early stages of planning the rewrites for these, your comments are more than helpful. You touched on a lot of points, so I'll try to cover as many as I can without writing an essay
- Firstly, I do enjoy writing Vanessa: she and Sahara are my favourite characters in this story because of their backstories, personalities and their general relationships.
- Sahara, clearly, does not have a normal disorder with her personalities. Don't want to say too much here since the next chapter (as in new one) touches on these elements so I shan't spoil the surprise, but I'll make a note of that when I rewrite.
- I regret Emerson as well. I wanted to cut him out in the rewrites but I think his role is actually a bit too vital in the long run to axe, at least with his connection to The Slayers, so I will keep him around but shake him up a bit.
- Ursilla didn't have powers, just weapons. She was a bit tooooo imaginative, looking back, so I can understand the confusion.
- I will definitely work on the battles. I was a bit new to writing them then so I hope to make things more interesting. I do find it hard sending out commands: they are fairly dull sentences to write for the most part.
- Will definitely work on the POV changes. I have big plans for the early chapters in term of padding things out and making them make more sense, so I hope to make them as a whole click better.
Other matters seem to be smaller issues, but I will take them into account. Some of the points will be redundant since some Pokemon will be cut and replaced in the rewrites to give greater effect to the story, but everything was read and noted and I will be likely coming back to this in the future. Glad you found some stuff to like amongst all the mess
Thanks for the feedback. As I am in the early stages of planning the rewrites for these, your comments are more than helpful. You touched on a lot of points, so I'll try to cover as many as I can without writing an essay
- Firstly, I do enjoy writing Vanessa: she and Sahara are my favourite characters in this story because of their backstories, personalities and their general relationships.
- Sahara, clearly, does not have a normal disorder with her personalities. Don't want to say too much here since the next chapter (as in new one) touches on these elements so I shan't spoil the surprise, but I'll make a note of that when I rewrite.
- I regret Emerson as well. I wanted to cut him out in the rewrites but I think his role is actually a bit too vital in the long run to axe, at least with his connection to The Slayers, so I will keep him around but shake him up a bit.
- Ursilla didn't have powers, just weapons. She was a bit tooooo imaginative, looking back, so I can understand the confusion.
- I will definitely work on the battles. I was a bit new to writing them then so I hope to make things more interesting. I do find it hard sending out commands: they are fairly dull sentences to write for the most part.
- Will definitely work on the POV changes. I have big plans for the early chapters in term of padding things out and making them make more sense, so I hope to make them as a whole click better.
Other matters seem to be smaller issues, but I will take them into account. Some of the points will be redundant since some Pokemon will be cut and replaced in the rewrites to give greater effect to the story, but everything was read and noted and I will be likely coming back to this in the future. Glad you found some stuff to like amongst all the mess