Middle of nowhere

[Toushiro]

It's a fan fic, duh!
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To tell you the truth, not many travellers and tourists understood the rituals and celebrations of Solaceon town. If you ask the locals, they'll tell you. Solaceon was a farming community, and as such, it hung on to many aspects of life that other cities abandoned in favor of urban life. Now, don't misunderstand, Solaceon isn't just a farm. There are residential area's, shops and restaurants. Our story however, begins on a farm, far away from the tourist territory.

On a plot of land, about 300 acres long, were two solitary buildings. One, a large black barn, held stables and hay, and the other, a cabin held a family. Outside the farm were Pokemon, the way the occupants made their living, they were no ordinary farmers. They were Pokemon breeders, and the owners of the Solaceon pokemon Daycare.

Inside the Cabin, an alarm clock was ringing. The boy inside the bed staggered out of the bed.

"6 already"? The boy said, stretching. "Today's the day"! He was correct. For every July 17, the Youth of Solaceon Town would go out into the wilderness and capture their first Pokemon!


EDIT: SOMEONE POST!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

 

[Toushiro]

Chapter 2.

The morning routine went as usual. Eddy brushed his hair and teeth, got dressed and went down to eat breakfast. Since his parents were busy selecting the Pokemon that would be shipped to Sandgem town and given to new trainers, he had the house to himself. Walking out of the house and into the yard, he Slipped passed the Tauros and Miltank, he crossed into the starter barn. Sitting in tiny stalls were various Pokemon that would be considered for new Journies. Eddy walked into the third stall to the left and patted the head of a dopey looking Marill.

"Hey bud, are you excited"? Eddy asked, kneeling down to Marill's level.

"Marrril"! The aqua green Pokemon said proudly. Being a 'Shiny' Pokemon, Marill had a large chance of being picked.

'Well, I know I'll miss you" said Eddy, standing up. "Hey, you wanna come with me to visit Duke"? Eddy said, gesturing with his hand.

"Mariiii" Said the Pokemon happily.

"Alright then" Said Eddy, picking up the Pokeball that sat on the mantle of the stall. Marill was drawn into the Pokeball's red glow. Eddy clipped the ball onto his belt and walked out of the barn door. Darting across the barnyard, he lept over Miltank pies and tried not to get kicked by Tauros.

Biking down the sunparched highway, Eddy's forehead was drenched with sweat. Stopping to drink what remained in his water bottle, Eddy thought of an idea. "Marill, come out"! "Hey Marill, could you blast me with a water gun"?

"Marill". The Pokemon dully replied. A small trickle of water hit Eddy's face.

"You call that a water gun''? Said Eddy impatiently.

"Marill". The pokemon replied with a tint of anger. "Marill"! The Pokemon unleashed a Powerful blast of water, sending Eddy flying over the roadside bushes.

"Whoa, too much"! Eddy flew farther, into the rushing river. "Help, Marill'!

Marril stood by the roadside, looking confused and watched Eddy float out of sight.

 

[Barb]

Your chapter are a bit short. How about lengthening them slightly to provide for plot and character development?

 

[Bluntasaur]

You grammar's passable, but the story is just....meh. It doesn't feel like it's going anywhere.

 

[Toushiro]

You grammar's passable, but the story is just....meh. It doesn't feel like it's going anywhere.

Well, the first two chapters were really just testers. I'll try making the chapters longer and progress the story more when the next chapter comes out.